It was proactive and action-oriented vice
Curved around its self twice or slyly slight thrice
For Clip was firm and held things in place
And Paper seldom exceeded plead, just-in-case
From a box of many it came
Here to keep these Papers tame
Assistant to red-tape, it had many uses
Manipulated, it could be bent and twirled as abuses
And the Paper would line, waiting for ink
Sometimes teetering right next to the brink
Deskination, brings about jag and rip
And so this is the battle of Paper & Clip
Wednesday, January 26, 2011
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When I read this poem I get a sing-song flow in my mind. Most of the flow works, but some did not. Take the third line for example, "For clip was firm and held things in proper place." held things in proper place just dosen't flow well with the first two lines.
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ReplyDeleteI know it's a bit tired, but I really do love poems that rhyme, I love the way they sound. I really liked the imagery that you brought to such simple every day objects as the paper and the paper clip. Nice work.
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